Revised Unit 3 Project/The changes I made

Natural Science Revised Draft

For this revision I just fixed my conclusion and tried to connect it with the data that was found and the beginning paragraph. My original essay was not really connected, I brought up a theory and tested it but never talked about the theory in my conclusion. I attempted to connect that theory in my conclusion, I feel as if it overall made the paper make more sense.

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